College Essay on Scootering

[MarkM]

Hey guys, I've been filling out college applications for the past month or so and the only part I have left is a personal statement essay. A personal statement can be writing about anything I like as long as it relates to my lifestyle. Most colleges like to see a unique essay rather than the common "Im the perfect student" essay. So I've decided to write about scootering, no joke. I'm making the thesis on how scootering is a form of art rather than just a sport. For instance, I'm going to explain how I see the skatepark as the canvas and the scooter as a paintbrush. I also want to include how scootering pushes individuals to their limit etc. so I was wondering if anybody wanted to give me some ideas about how scootering relates to dedication, practice makes perfect, and anything else. I really appreciate the help and I'll post the essay when I'm finished.

Mark

 

[Grant Schofield]

Well youre going to need to explain scootering as a sport before you do that because chances are they dont know that people even rode scooters except for transportation.

 

[MarkM]

Well youre going to need to explain scootering as a sport before you do that because chances are they dont know that people even rode scooters except for transportation.

Yeah, I just said that it was similar to skateboarding in ways of defying gravity, stretching the laws of physics, and pushing riders to their fullest potential.

Thanks for the feedback

 

[Grant Schofield]

Have you already made your thesis?

 

[Bennett_J]

Hints:

Grammar, complexity of words, and format are key, don't fuck it up.

As for the essay, go for it, that sounds pretty tight, college essays don't have a "thesis" per se, more so a topic. It is an essay to brag, not another school assignment. Think of it like that and your golden like r kelly

 

[Tylerr.]

I wrote about scooters for my college essay, i think.

 

[Robert Reichley]

dude i swear im doing the same thing. im almost done with mine. my parents are suuuper tight that thats what im writing about but fuck it. -__-

 

[Connor Love]

thats awesome man, i wrote mine about surfing and music but yeah pretty similar subject. but yeah you may want to talk about how it is so new and how you are a trailblazer in some respect (use a better word than that) but you get the idea, explain why you are unique and why the hell this college wants to admit you.

 

[tylerbillman]

Hints:

Grammar, complexity of words, and format are key, don't fuck it up.

As for the essay, go for it, that sounds pretty tight, college essays don't have a "thesis" per se, more so a topic. It is an essay to brag, not another school assignment. Think of it like that and your golden like r kelly

NO.

Do not use any words you do not already use on a day to day basis. EVER. It is superficial and shitty.

The key is going to be a strong main idea, since it's more of a personal essay than it is an argumentative essay which would need a thesis.

Here's what you do: powerful intro sentece, topic sentence, one to two sentences of background on scootering as a sport, then the meat to your topic sentence, followed by an extra strong closer. Make it personal, unique, and compelling.

Here's why I can tell you how to write your essay: I'm already in college at UNC Chapel Hill and am an English Major.

 

[Damianscoots]

first write about how scootering started out and who the first scooter was not inteded for doing tricks on but actually was made for some lazy guy to get around his big factory faster....then basically it was a trend in the 2000s and as the trend died some people kept riding and kept doing tricks......ext...scootering still has a LONG ways to go

 

[tylerbillman]

Don't go more than say, 10 or 15 words over the limit either. It's not ok.

Focus on the personal part, not the history of scootering.

 

[Maz.]

I see the skatepark as the canvas and the scooter as a paintbrush.

good quote

 

[Ellie]

just do ittt. scootering is definitely a unique topic to touch on. a friend of mine wrote about yoyoing and pokemon and got into cornell. he even sent them a video of him yoyoing.

pretty sick i guess.

 

[Dom Marconi]

I wrote about scooters for my college essay, and I got into a very nice school.

 

[tylerbillman]

I wrote about scooters for my college essay, and I got into a very nice school.

Proof that schools don't want cookie-cutter kids.

They want well-rounded and individualistic people who have a vision or who can contribute.
I think the scooter essay will be great man.

 

[MarkM]

Thanks for all the feed back guys! I submitted my application to NC State Saturday night. However I couldn't flow with my writing on the scooter so I just did a regular personal essay. Sorry guys, but my next deadline for UNCW is November first.

Tyler, I'm applying to chapel hill for the next deadline. It's not my number one choice but I think I figured I'd give it a shot. We're you taking AP classes and all that too? And did you have a high SAT score? I'm just getting nervous with competition

 

[Frank T]

Thanks for all the feed back guys! I submitted my application to NC State Saturday night. However I couldn't flow with my writing on the scooter so I just did a regular personal essay. Sorry guys, but my next deadline for UNCW is November first.

Tyler, I'm applying to chapel hill for the next deadline. It's not my number one choice but I think I figured I'd give it a shot. We're you taking AP classes and all that too? And did you have a high SAT score? I'm just getting nervous with competition

I'm only a junior but I think next year I'm applying to nc state and chapel hill haha

 

[MarkM]

It's not revised and edited, but here's my beginning


Kick. Push. Kick. Push. Glide. I effortlessly ride my scooter throughout the skatepark where I'm finally set free; my escape. I know what you're thinking, did he just say scooter? Isn't that a kids toy?" Well, the answer depends who you ask. Scootering is much like the sport of skateboarding in ways of defying gravity, extending the laws of physics, and pushing riders to their fullest potential. Once I step onto the cement pavement, I enter a whole new world. A limited escape from the reality of the world. I consider scootering to be a sport as well as a form of art, where the skatepark is my canvas and my scooter is the paintbrush.

 

[Robert Reichley]

" I enter a whole new world. A limited escape from the reality of the world."

using world at the end of two adjacent sentences sounds wierd when read aloud